Reader would have a field day.
I have some clarifications (shown in context in bold below) that you could put in your version if you agree with them.
End of page 6: he would
have left the house
Page 9 -> Jeremy didn't
particularly like
End of page 9: Jeremy mentioned
aboutPage 10: pigeon clock and
china and silver
Page 13: Jeremy who appeared
upset.
End of page 13: I
didn't say anything
On page 14, there is a crossed out partial sentence: He said that Mathew had phoned him from the farm, which I took to be White House Farm, that morning and
That crossed out sentence is followed by: He said that before he had phoned me that morning Mathew had phoned from the house, which I took to be the farm, and said that everything
had been
completed and
proceeded to tell him about